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how much do you want to read this comming epic tale?
Really bad!!
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PostSubject: delayed plans   Fri May 22, 2009 12:08 am

So, im afraid to say that that the progress on the upcoming epic tales, Becoming a Pizza Bandit(Title still needs work)and Revenge of the Revanents(I mentioned this title breifly today) probably will have to be posponed. I have a busy weekend and a school project due soon. Now, before you get mad at me, heres a sneak peak,I will give you the proluge to The first epic tale.(all of this is work in progress, if I confuse peoples names or events that happen then too bad)

As the darkness and fog settled in the wilderness, a spirit of the decesed sensed the powerful presence of three...no, five indivituals,two of which just crossed into the wilderness. He set off towards the weaker of the two, barring his teeth and longing for the taste of fresh blood. Blood that he hasn't had since his death... As the two companions slowly went deeper into the wilderness, the spirits of the wilderness began to stir out of their slumber...longing to maul,kill,and destroy these poor fools who desturbed their domain.
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PostSubject: Re: delayed plans   Fri May 22, 2009 12:10 am

Please point out any spelling errors, I want to make this think perfect
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PostSubject: Re: delayed plans   Fri May 22, 2009 12:33 am

By saying that, you just gave me a free ride to your doom and destruction. At any rate...here's my edited copy.

As the darkness and fog settled in the wilderness, a spirit of the deceased sensed the powerful presence of three...no, five individuals, two of which had just crossed into the wilderness. He set off towards the weakest group, baring his teeth and longing for the taste of fresh blood. Blood that he hadn't had since his death... As the two companions slowly made their way deeper into the wilderness, the long-dead spirits began to stir out of their slumber...longing to maul, kill, and destroy these poor fools who had dared to disturb them in their domain.
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PostSubject: Re: delayed plans   Fri May 22, 2009 12:37 am

I kinda ment spelling errors not an edit copy,but still thanks! Hope it wasnt too much trouble
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PostSubject: Re: delayed plans   Fri May 22, 2009 12:38 am

Nah, not at all. I love editing stuff. I tried to fix just spelling, but I noticed some grammar (verb tenses, mainly) that could use some touching up. Then I changed the last part because you said "wilderness" twice rather close to each other.
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PostSubject: Re: delayed plans   Fri May 22, 2009 12:42 am

alright! Thanks!
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PostSubject: Re: delayed plans   Fri May 22, 2009 12:57 am

You're welcome! Cool
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PostSubject: Re: delayed plans   Sun May 24, 2009 1:58 am

Ice, it might be a good idea to PM a copy of the finished stories to Swallow to proofread before you actually publicly post them.

I LOVE the story so far, can't wait for the rest... I'll just try to forget about it until release.
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PostSubject: Re: delayed plans   Sun May 24, 2009 9:20 am

My editing skills cannot be eclipsed! Very Happy

Yeah, with all the time you're putting in, I bet it's already amazing.
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PostSubject: Re: delayed plans   Sun May 24, 2009 1:20 pm

Yeah.. someone who is so critical has GOT to be a good editor.

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PostSubject: Re: delayed plans   Sun May 24, 2009 6:23 pm

That would be correct.
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PostSubject: Re: delayed plans   Tue May 26, 2009 2:40 pm

lol, I was right!
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PostSubject: Re: delayed plans   Tue May 26, 2009 6:32 pm

Yeah, once in a blue moon type thing.
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